Thread: Can You Spot What's Missing From This Paragraph?
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Old 10-20-2008, 12:08 PM   #19
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Originally Posted by xmasbaby75 View Post
Not sure if I'm right, but I seee a couple things wrong with it ...

1. It's Too long (most paragraphs consist of 3-5 sentences)
2. You can't start a sentence with "But" or "And"
Wrong! PM me when you think of another answer.
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